雅思作文范文賞析—中學畢業(yè)后的“間隔年”要怎么表達

雅思作文范文賞析—中學畢業(yè)后的“間隔年”要怎么表達

　　本文給大家介紹雅思寫作關(guān)于間隔年的考官范文，重點學習考官是如何入題、如何立論、如何論述、如何結(jié)尾，還有如何承接過渡的?？傊褪菍W習這些范文的骨架是如何搭建的。

　　給大家講解文章邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)的題目選自劍橋系列叢書中最重要的題目之一：

　　In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. (某事件利弊探討)

　　此題討論的問題是著名的“間隔年”，學生中學畢業(yè)后是否應該take a year off?

　　參考范文一：側(cè)重支持taking a gap year

　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students (who have the money to travel), but is并列謂語 also evident among poorer students (who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time).具象思維Generally, I think that this practice could lead to many desirable results.

　　立論段：

　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that同位語從句 a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life.

　　Outline:

　　1)general knowledge and experience of the world

　　have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on

　　2)tend to be more independent

　　a very important factor in academic study and research

　　giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life

　　give sb. an edge/advantage in sth. 給某人某方面的優(yōu)勢

　　駁論段：

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think it is less likely today, when academic qualifications文憑 are essential for getting a reasonable career.

　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and并列句 taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

　　本文是考官滿分范文，建議6-7分學員認真學習內(nèi)容。

　　分析：

　　有選擇、有側(cè)重的邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)：

　　第一段：用簡潔的語言直接引出討論，學生無論貧富都可以選擇take a gap year。寫作開頭簡潔很重要。如果用看似華麗的套句會給人模板的感覺導致低分。

　　第二段：立論段：對比直接論證選擇take the gap year學生更有優(yōu)勢。本段是議論文寫作提出支持文章中心觀點的分論點，并對其進行有效支持和擴展的部分，屬于主要得分段落。

　　第三段：駁論段：先讓步，說選擇gap year的學生會面臨的影響，但是又說明這種影響很容易避免，從而進一步論證自己的觀點。一個優(yōu)秀的考生除了能夠使用恰當?shù)恼摀?jù)支持自己的觀點外，還必須能對自己相反的觀點進行有效評價。

　　第四段：表明文章中心觀點，傾向支持學生take the gap year。再次強調(diào)重要性。

　　關(guān)于這篇范文分析完畢，同學們對照著老師的分段分析可以進行其他范文的試答，相信會有不一樣的收獲。

　　-總結(jié)文章的論證，并且得出結(jié)論，再次表明文章批判性的中立觀點。

　　-適當對文章的論證進行擴展和升華，可再次強調(diào)文章為何持有批判性中立觀點，但切忌引入新觀點和內(nèi)容。